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summary: 本视频深入探讨了中国语文教育中作文教学的弊端，指出其机械化的教学方法、对学生真实情感的压制，以及对模板化写作的过度依赖，导致学生在写作中产生强烈的羞耻感和身份认同冲突。文章分析了这种教育模式如何损害学生的叙事能力、语言感知力，并最终将作文变成一种脱离现实、高度程式化的“加密语言”，对个人成长和表达能力造成长期而深远的影响。
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title: 中国语文作文的“加密语言”：羞耻感、模板化与深远影响
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### 引言：从语文教学方法到作文困境

大家好，我是Anthony，欢迎来到我的频道。今天的视频，我们来继续昨天的话题，聊聊中国的语文教育。在昨天的视频中，我们分析了语文课的教学方法，即那套讲解生词、划分段落、归纳主旨和分析写作特点的机械化、程式化的解释套路。

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<p class="english-text">Hello everyone, I am Anthony
Welcome to my channel
Today's video
Let’s continue with yesterday’s topic
Let’s talk about Chinese language education in China
In yesterday's video
We analyzed the teaching methods of Chinese language classes
That is, the same set of explaining new words and dividing paragraphs.
Summarize the main idea and analyze the process of writing characteristics
This mechanical and stereotyped explanation routine</p>
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这种机械和刻板的解释套路，让学生很难感受到与作者之间的情感共鸣和触动，它扼杀了学生对文章整体的把握能力。例如，一篇散文，学生只记住了这句用了比喻、排比等**修辞手法**（Rhetorical Devices: 运用语言以增强表达效果的技巧），却很难感受到作者所传达的情感。

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<p class="english-text">Make it difficult for students to feel
Emotional resonance and touch with the author
It stifles students' ability to grasp the overall article
For example, an essay
The students only remembered this sentence.
Use metaphors, parallelism and other rhetorical devices
But it is difficult to feel the emotions conveyed by the author</p>
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尽管老师会总结这篇文章传达了作者的某种情感，但这种总结往往是强加的，学生缺乏理解这种情感的相关知识和背景，只是为了得分，不得不接受老师自上而下的**灌输**（Indoctrination: 强制性地反复灌输思想或信仰）。

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<p class="english-text">Although the teacher will summarize
This article conveys a certain emotion of the author
But this kind of summary is often a forced summary.
Students lack the ability to understand this emotion.
Related knowledge and background
Just to get points
And have to accept the teacher's top-down indoctrination</p>
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这不仅阻碍和压制了学生对阅读的自发兴趣，也容易让学生形成一种单一、僵化的真理观，即只允许一种正统的解释，拒绝其他可能性。那么今天，我们来聊聊另一个令人头疼的话题，那就是语文作文。

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<p class="english-text">This not only hinders and suppresses students
Spontaneous interest in reading
It is also easy for students to form
A single, rigid view of truth
That is, only one orthodox interpretation is allowed.
Rejecting other possibilities
That today
Let's talk about another annoying topic.
It's Chinese composition</p>
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在开始之前，我再多说一句，如果你对今天的视频感兴趣，或者你有什么想和我探讨的话题，可以通过我的邮箱联系我预约。现在，让我们回到今天的话题。

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<p class="english-text">Let me say one more thing before we start
If you are interested in today's video
or
Do you have any topic you want to discuss with me?
You can contact my email to make an appointment
Let's get back to our topic today.</p>
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### 作文：羞耻感的来源与身份认同的冲突

说到语文作文，我认为这绝对是许多中国人在学生时代最头疼的任务之一。学生们要么无话可写，要么只能被迫写一些空话、假话，或者绞尽脑汁，从范文中摘抄一些千篇一律的优美词句。

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<p class="english-text">Speaking of Chinese composition
I think
This is definitely a problem that many Chinese people have when they are students.
One of the most annoying tasks
Students either have nothing to write
Or you can only be forced to write some empty words and false words
Or racking your brains
From the Fanwen
Excerpt some good words and sentences that are all the same</p>
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如果说数学带来的是挫败和痛苦，那么写作常常让学生感到羞耻。尽管学生们知道，我写作文只是为了考试分数，并不代表真实想法，但我仍然不忍心阅读自己写的东西，对自己的作品感到羞耻和尴尬。

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<p class="english-text">If mathematics brings
Frustration and pain
Writing often makes students feel ashamed.
Although students know
I write essays just for the sake of exam scores
Does not represent real thoughts
But I still can't bear to read what I wrote
I feel ashamed of what I wrote.
Awkward</p>
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这种微妙的羞耻感、尴尬，源于身份的撕裂和冲突。我们说，一个人说的话、写下的文字，无论是真实情感的表达，还是因考试需要而编造的，都可以被视为自我的延伸。它也可以说是作为客体的自我。

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<p class="english-text">This subtle sense of shame, embarrassment
Split and conflict due to identity
We say
What a person said
Written text
Whether it is the expression of true emotion
Or is it fabricated due to the need of examination?
can be seen as an extension of the self.
It can also be said that the self as an object</p>
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这个作为客体的“我”，必然会得到他人赋予的意义、评论和反馈。当他人想要理解作为主体的内在自我时，只能依赖这些外在的客体。而我也会从他人对我的反馈中，认识自己并构建自己的身份。

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<p class="english-text">This object of me
It is inevitable that others will give it meaning.
Reviews and Feedback
When the other wants to understand the inner self as a subject
I can only rely on these external objects
And I will also get feedback from others about me.
To know oneself
and build their own identity</p>
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然而，当**客体自我**（Objective Self: 呈现在外部世界，被他人观察和评价的自我）无法代表**主体自我**（Subjective Self: 个人内在的真实感受、思想和意图）时，而他人仍在审视这个客体的我，我就会感到被困住，想要逃离这种**异化感**（Alienation: 感到与自我、他人或社会脱离的状态），那就是羞耻。

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<p class="english-text">However
When the objective self cannot represent the subjective self
While others are still looking at the objective me
I'll feel caught.
I want to escape this feeling of alienation.
That's shame.</p>
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也就是说，我不愿意面对和承认这个客体的自我，不想看到它，想要摆脱这个场景。羞耻感就来源于这种无法逃避的焦虑：明知道这些文字无法代表我的真实想法，却不得不承受社会对这些文字的评价，甚至会被公开展示。

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<p class="english-text">That is
I am unwilling to face and acknowledge the objective self
Don't want to see it
Want to get rid of this scene
Shame comes from this inescapable anxiety
Knowing
These words cannot represent my true thoughts
But you have to bear
The social evaluation of these words
It will even be put on public display.</p>
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### 写作困境与心理整合的缺失

有理由相信，这种充斥着空话和假话的作文教育，给许多中国人造成了长期而深刻的写作困难。即使是那些厌恶应试语文教育的人，他们虽然可以阻止自己说空话、假话，但那种自由表达自我、探索自我的写作能力，却不可能凭空拥有。

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<p class="english-text">There is reason to believe
This kind of composition education is full of empty words and lies
To many Chinese
All of these have caused long-term and profound writing difficulties.
Even those who dislike Chinese education
them
Although I can stop myself from speaking empty words and lies
But that kind of writing
The ability to express oneself freely and explore oneself
But it is impossible to have it out of thin air</p>
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正如我们在12月8日的视频中说过的，许多中国学生成年后，仍然在写作中感到痛苦，即使在工作中写一篇简单的文字，也感到强烈的阻力，甚至大脑一片空白，不知道如何下笔，更不擅长写出表达真实想法的文字。一旦写出真情实感，反而会感到非常羞耻。

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<p class="english-text">As we said in this video on December 8:
Many Chinese students become adults
Still feel pain in writing
Even writing a simple text at work
Feeling strong resistance
Even the brain is blank
Don't know how to start
Not even good at writing
Words that express your true thoughts
Once you write your true feelings
I feel very ashamed</p>
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写作本身可以作为自我探索的核心手段。当一个人的真实想法通过文字表达出来时，他可以体验到被倾听的感觉，即使只是对自己而言。这种自我倾听的过程，对**心理整合**（Psychological Integration: 将个人内部的各种冲突、矛盾和碎片化的经验统一起来，形成一个连贯、完整的自我）非常重要。

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<p class="english-text">Writing itself
It can be used as a core means of self-exploration
When a person's true thoughts
When expressed through words
He can experience the feeling of being heard.
Even if it's just for myself
This process of self-listening
Very important for psychological integration</p>
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但中国中小学的作文，在很大程度上破坏了学生对文字的正常感受。例如，学生被要求符合固定的道德标准，比如“感恩父母”、“奋斗青春”等。这些主题并不对应他们真实的感受。

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<p class="english-text">But the composition of Chinese primary and secondary schools
To a large extent
Destroy students' normal feeling for words
For example, students are asked to
Conform to fixed moral standards
For example, "Be grateful to parents", "Striving youth", etc.
These themes do not correspond to their true emotions</p>
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我们说，个体理解自己真实感受的能力，需要长期的训练和培养。当写作长期充斥着谎言和陈词滥调时，个体就逐渐丧失了准确感知文字的能力，也丧失了写出自己真实感受的能力。谎言和陈词滥调的共同点在于，它们是脱离现实的，其底层逻辑是混乱的，因此也无法帮助人们理解和总结现实。

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<p class="english-text">We say
The ability of an individual to understand his or her true feelings
It requires long-term training and cultivation
When writing is filled with lies and clichés for a long time
individual
I gradually lost the ability to accurately perceive words.
I also lost the ability to write about my true feelings.
The commonality between our lies and clichés is that
They are disconnected from reality
The underlying logic is confusing
thus
It is also unable to help people understand and summarize reality.</p>
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而清晰、真实、有力量的语言，可以强化一个人的主体性，让人意识到，在其各种碎片化的表象之下，拥有一个连贯的自我。当一个人意识到这种自我认同感时，这本身就能给他带来一种无条件的、稳定的自尊，让他更有力量去抵抗环境或外部的干扰。

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<p class="english-text">And clear, true, powerful language
Can strengthen a person's subjectivity
Make people aware
Under its various and fragmented appearances
Have a consistent self
When one realizes this self-identity
This in itself can bring him an unconditional
Stable self-esteem
Make him more powerful
To resist environmental or external interference</p>
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而糟糕的写作教育最大的危害是，它要求学生写出大量自相矛盾、令人困惑的文字。个体虽然写着以“我”为主语的句子，但主语之后的内容却是“我”不认同的，或者没有真实情感的。这会破坏个体对语言的感知和信任，从而使个体的人格处于一种碎片化的状态，他的内在力量始终笼罩在一层朦胧的迷雾之中。

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<p class="english-text">And the poor writing education
The greatest harm is
He asked students to write a lot of contradictory
Confusing words
Although individuals write
Sentences with "I" as the subject
But the content after the subject is something I don't agree with
Or no real emotion
This can undermine an individual's perception and trust in the language
thereby
The individual personality is in a fragmented state
His Inner Strength
Always shrouded in a hazy mist</p>
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这其中隐藏着一个假设，即人在自然状态下的情感体验、行为和认知往往是碎片化的。例如，一个人在工作中严谨，在家庭中沉默，在朋友面前又活泼开朗。这些多元而矛盾的体验，会造成个体身份的混乱和分裂。要整合这些混乱的体验，只能依靠语言和叙事。叙事可以为个人体验提供一些连贯的意义。

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<p class="english-text">There is an assumption hidden in this.
It is the emotional experience of people in their natural state.
Behavior and cognition
Often fragmented
For example, a person is strict at work.
Silent in the family
In front of a friend, I am lively again
These diverse and contradictory experiences
It will cause confusion and division in the individual's identity
To integrate these chaotic experiences
Only language and narrative can be relied upon
Narratives can provide a personal experience
Give some coherent meaning</p>
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### 模板化作文对叙事能力的损害

那么，中国的作文教育是如何损害学生的**叙事能力**（Narrative Ability: 组织和表达个人经历、思想和情感的能力）的呢？这首先体现在作文题目的程式化上。例如，小学作文通常要求学生写“我的家乡”、“我的课余生活”、“我的爸爸妈妈”、“班上我最关心的人”、“记一件快乐的小事”。

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<p class="english-text">So
Composition Education in China
How does it harm students' narrative ability?
This is first reflected in the stereotype of the composition topic.
for example
Primary school composition
Students are usually asked to write about "My Hometown"
"My spare time" "My parents"
“The person I care about most in class”
"Remember a little happy thing"</p>
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出题人和老师通常会要求学生写出真情实感，不要抄袭，不要千篇一律。但事实上，如果学生真的写下自己的真实想法，却很容易被批评为“不健康”。因为这种教育最多只能接受最稚嫩、最天真的愿望，例如享受美丽的自然风光，但却无法接受人作为动物的私人化、个性化的愿望。

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<p class="english-text">Questioner and teacher
Students are usually asked to write out their true feelings.
Don't copy
Don’t be cookie-cutter
But in fact
If students really write down their true thoughts
It is easy to be criticized as unhealthy
Because this education
At most, I can accept the most childish
The most innocent wish
For example, enjoy the beautiful natural scenery
But they cannot accept human animals.
Private, personalized wishes</p>
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例如，一个男生觉得，自己在学校最快乐的事就是给喜欢的女生传小纸条、互相抄作业，但这显然不能写。所以他只能写自己的课余生活多么丰富多彩，男生喜欢打球，女生喜欢跳绳、踢毽子，大家的生活都很多样，都非常快乐。

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<p class="english-text">For example, a boy feels
What is the happiest thing about me in school?
Just passing little notes to the girls you like
Copy each other's homework
But this obviously cannot be written
So he could only write about how rich his spare time at school was.
Boys like to play ball
Girls like skipping rope and kicking shuttlecock
Everyone's life is diverse
All very happy</p>
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再比如，写自己佩服的同学，你不能写你真正佩服他的地方，结果就是无话可写，只能写他是一个优秀的少先队员，比如捡到别人的钱包上交，扶老人过马路。最后的作文，就变成了一场中国式感人故事的“无脸”展览。

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<p class="english-text">For example, write about classmates you admire
You can't write about what you really admire about him.
The result is nothing to write
I can only write that he is an excellent member
For example, if you find someone else's wallet, you can turn it in.
Helping an elderly person cross the road
The last composition
It has become a faceless exhibition of touching stories of China</p>
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### “严父慈母”的刻板叙事

例如，写自己的妈妈，这个题目显然涉及真实的亲子关系。如果要写真实情况，就意味着学生需要进行深度的自我披露，这需要一种安全感。但中国的作文环境显然无法提供这种安全的接纳。

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<p class="english-text">For example
Write about your mother
This topic obviously involves real parent-child relationships
If you want to write the truth
It means
Students need to engage in a deep self-disclosure
This requires a sense of security.
But the environment of Chinese composition
Obviously, this kind of safe acceptance cannot be provided</p>
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于是，学生们只能按照一个非常老套的模板来写。例如，“我放学回家，总能看到妈妈站在厨房里做饭，妈妈总是那么忙碌，妈妈真伟大。”再比如，写自己的爸爸，常见的套路是，我一开始觉得爸爸总是很严厉，不理解爸爸，后来才发现爸爸经常加班，都有白头发了，我顿时感到愧疚。

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<p class="english-text">then
Students can only follow a very old-fashioned template
Come write
For example, "I get out of school
I always see my mother standing in the kitchen cooking
Mom is always busy
Mom is so great"
For example, writing about your own father
A common routine is
I felt that my father was always very strict at first.
I don't understand my dad
Later I found out that my father often worked overtime
All have white hair
I suddenly felt guilty</p>
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这种叙事风格，显然是中国语文教育的结果，它必须符合“严父慈母”的框架。母亲的主要特点是无私奉献，不求回报地付出；父亲则必须严厉内敛，不善言辞，但内心总是支持着孩子。

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<p class="english-text">This narrative style
This is obviously the result of Chinese language education.
It must fit into the framework of a strict father and a kind mother.
The main characteristic of a mother is selfless devotion
Give without regrets
The father must be strict and restrained
Poor at speaking
But I always support my children in my heart.</p>
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“严父慈母”的叙事风格，最符合中国意识形态所推崇的家庭伦理——**父权与孝道**（Patriarchy and Filial Piety: 以男性为中心的社会权力结构和子女对父母的尊敬与服从）。母亲代表着等级制度中柔性的一面，通过默默牺牲让人感恩；父亲代表着等级制度中刚性的一面，通过威严和专断教育孩子服从。

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<p class="english-text">The narrative style of strict father and kind mother
Most in line with Chinese ideology
The family ethics that are promoted
Patriarchy and filial piety
Mothers represent the soft side of the hierarchy
Make people grateful by silently sacrificing
The father represents the rigid side of the hierarchy.
Through majesty and arbitrariness
Teach children to obey</p>
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这种高度程式化的父母形象，当然与现实严重不符。然而，学生们发现，按照这个模板来写父母，更容易获得高分。如果如实写父母的缺点，不仅得不到高分，甚至可能遭到老师的批评，或者被同学嘲笑。

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<p class="english-text">This highly stylized parental image
Of course, this is seriously inconsistent with reality.
However, students found
Write about your parents according to this template
Easier to get high scores
If you write about your parents' shortcomings truthfully,
Not only can you not get high scores
You may even be criticized by your teacher.
Or being laughed at by classmates</p>
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### “思乡”情结与符号化人物

例如，许多作文题目要求学生写家乡，这显得非常奇怪。因为绝大多数学生从小生活在自己的城市，很多人可能从未搬过家，对家乡或故乡没有清晰的感受。所以我们只能编造经历或套用模板，我明明在城市长大，却要写自己的家乡在农村，去描写大自然，最后还要表达思乡之情。

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<p class="english-text">For example
Many essay topics require students to write about their hometown
This seems very strange
Because the vast majority of students
Living in my own city since childhood
Many people may have never moved.
No clear sense of hometown or native place
So we can only make up experiences or apply templates
I grew up in the city.
I have to write that my hometown is in the countryside.
To describe nature
Finally, you must express your homesickness</p>
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思乡，在中国语文教育中是一个相当普遍的主题，甚至成为了一个网络迷因。在B站和抖音上，“思乡”这个迷因常常被用来表达一种无厘头、解构和恶搞的意味。例如，数学题解不出来，就写“表达思乡之情”。这是因为许多中国学生在做语文阅读理解时，如果被问到文章反映了什么思想感情，而自己完全没看懂，直接写作者的思乡之情，就有一定的概率蒙对，它是一个万能模板。

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<p class="english-text">Homesickness
Chinese language education
A fairly common theme
It even became an internet meme
On Station B and Tik Tok
The meme "Homesickness"
Often used to express
A nonsensical, deconstructive and spoof meaning
For example, I can't solve math problems.
Just write "expressing homesickness"
This is because
Many Chinese students do Chinese reading comprehension
If asked
What thoughts and feelings does the article reflect?
And I didn't understand it at all
It directly expresses the author's homesickness.
There is a certain probability of guessing right
It's a general template</p>
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那么中国的教育，为什么如此强调思乡呢？我们后面再详细讨论，这里先挖个坑。

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<p class="english-text">What about Chinese education?
Why is there so much emphasis on homesickness?
We will discuss this in detail later.
Dig a hole here first</p>
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除此之外，语文作文中还存在着大量代表某种精神的特定人物。例如，提到坚韧不拔，就一定要想到忍辱负重写《史记》的司马迁；提到鞠躬尽瘁、无私奉献，就想到诸葛亮；提到不怕挫折，就一定要提到爱迪生发明电灯泡失败了一千次。还有李白、杜甫、唐太宗李世民等等。

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<p class="english-text">besides
Chinese language composition
Still exists
A large number of specific characters representing a certain spirit
For example, when it comes to perseverance
I must think of Sima Qian who endured humiliation and wrote the Records of the Grand Historian.
When it comes to devoting oneself to one's work, one should be selfless.
I think of Zhuge Liang
When it comes to not being afraid of setbacks, we must mention
Edison failed a thousand times before he invented the light bulb
There are also Li Bai, Du Fu, Emperor Taizong of Tang Li Shimin, etc.</p>
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这些人物，他们都代表着某种精神或气质，他们的形象也高度程式化、符号化和道德化。

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<p class="english-text">These characters
They all represent a certain spirit or temperament.
Their images are also highly stereotyped
Symbolized and moralized</p>
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### 官样文章与政治教育

在本期3月份关于体制内**公文写作**（Official Document Writing: 政府或组织内部用于传达信息、决策或指令的正式书面沟通）的视频中，我也提到，中国有许多教公文写作的书籍，会分享一套公文写作的常用词汇。例如，谈到领导，就一定要是高瞻远瞩、高屋建瓴、亲力亲为、务实进取；谈到群众，就一定要是了解民情、融入群众、反映民意；提到天气，就是风和日丽。

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<p class="english-text">In this March issue of
In the video about official documents within the system
Also mentioned
There are many books in China that teach official document writing.
I will share with you a set of common vocabulary for official documents.
For example, leadership
It means to be far-sighted and have a bird's-eye view.
Take charge personally and be pragmatic and enterprising
Talking about the masses
It must be to understand the people's sentiments and integrate into the masses.
Reflecting public opinion
Mention of weather
It's sunny and windy.</p>
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这些陈词滥调虽然听起来令人厌烦，但最大的好处就是安全。公文写作是一件风险极高的事情，稍不留神就可能出错，并招致上级的惩罚。因此，为了与上级保持高度的**政治一致性**（Political Consistency: 在政治立场、政策和言论上与上级或主流保持高度统一），最安全的做法就是不断引用上级领导的讲话或党的文件。

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<p class="english-text">Although these clichés are annoying to hear
But the biggest benefit is safety
Official document writing is a very risky thing
If you are not careful, you may make a mistake.
And invite punishment from superiors
therefore
In order to maintain a high degree of political consistency with superiors
The safest approach
Just keep quoting the speeches of senior leaders.
or party documents</p>
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出于安全考虑，下面各级官员也会引用上一级的话，反复说官话套话，以此表明自己政治立场的坚定和明确。语文作文也是如此，中国的语言教育在政治教育中扮演着重要的角色，那就是向学生灌输爱国、奋斗、奉献的价值观。

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<p class="english-text">For safety reasons, officials at all levels below
They will also quote the words of the previous level.
Repeatedly speaking official rhetoric
This shows the firmness and clarity of one's political stance
The same is true for Chinese composition
Language Education in China
It plays an important role in political education
That is to instill in students the values ​​of patriotism, hard work,
The value of dedication</p>
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为了这个教学目标，学生只需要记住程式化的结论，任何对人物复杂性的深入洞察，都会导致对这些价值观的挑战和质疑。这就是语文作文一个永远无法解决的悖论。

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<p class="english-text">For this teaching goal
Students just need to remember the stereotyped conclusions.
Any more insight into the complexity of the characters
This will lead to challenges and doubts about these values.
This is Chinese language composition
A paradox that can never be solved</p>
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### 批评形式主义的形式主义

一方面，出题人和老师反复强调不要说假话、空话、套话，要写真情实感。但同时又要求你的情感必须是健康的、正能量的。而这种反复强调不要写套话，本身也是一种套话，它是在用套话来反对套话。

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<p class="english-text">On the one hand, the question setter and the teacher repeatedly emphasized
Don't tell lies or clichés
Be genuine
But it also requires that your emotions must be
Healthy, positive energy
But this repeated emphasis on not writing clichés
It is also a cliché in itself
It is using clichés to oppose clichés</p>
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这类似于中国体制内，时不时会发文件，去批评文山会海的**形式主义和官僚主义**（Formalism and Bureaucracy: 僵化地遵循形式和规则，忽视实际内容和效率的作风）。于是下级部门就说，要认真领会上级领导精神，多开会，多写公文去批评形式主义。然而，这种批评本身就是形式主义中的一环。

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<p class="english-text">This is similar to
China’s system
Documents are issued every now and then.
To criticize the formalism and bureaucracy of mountains of documents and endless meetings
So the lower level department said
Carefully understand the spirit of superior leaders
Have more meetings
Write more official documents to criticize formalism
However
This criticism itself is a link in formalism.</p>
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我们主要讨论了写作材料的套路化，除此之外，写作结构也是模板化的重灾区。例如，我看到了一篇有1.9万赞的文章，标题是《摸清套路者得天下》。作者认为，要提高写作成绩，短期内应该侧重于摸索套路，而不是提高素养，因为等不及。

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<p class="english-text">We have mainly discussed the
Routine of writing materials
besides
Writing structure is also a disaster area for templates
for example
I saw an article with 19,000 likes.
The title is "He who knows the routine will win the world"
The author believes that to improve writing performance
In the short term, we should focus on exploring routines
Rather than improving literacy
Because I can't wait</p>
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那么接下来，作者分享了4个万能的**议论文句式**（Argumentative Sentence Patterns: 用于表达论点、支撑论据和进行逻辑推理的固定句型），5个万能的名人名言，以及3个万能的结尾模板。为什么那些名人名言是万能的呢？因为它没有逻辑，包罗万象却又空洞，那种永远正确的废话。

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<p class="english-text">Then what's next
The author shares 4 universal argumentative sentence patterns
5 universal quotes from famous people
And 3 universal ending templates
Why are those famous quotes omnipotent?
Because there's no logic
Comprehensive but empty
The kind of nonsense that is always correct</p>
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后来我又看了这个博主的另一篇帖子，他分享了这个套路：把任何一个题目拆解成主题、主题的反面、主题的目的，用红、绿、蓝来代表。然后你就可以像这样代入公式。例如，作文题目是“创新”，那么创新的反面就是保守、不创新。那么，你就可以直接把这些词打进去。

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<p class="english-text">Later I read another post by this blogger
He shared this routine
Break any topic into topics
The opposite of the theme, and the purpose of the theme
Represented by red, green and blue
Then you can substitute it into the formula like
For example, the essay topic is Innovation
Then the opposite of innovation is conservatism.
No innovation
Then
You can just type these words directly into</p>
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例如，这句话说：“我们切莫沉溺于不创新，而在暂时的镜花水月里，拥抱创新精神，以蓬勃昂扬之姿，不忘初心之正，笃行变革之信，砥砺前行。”如果作文主题是“文化自信”，那么文化自信的同义词就是大国自信、爱国主义、爱国爱家；反面就是文化不自信、崇洋媚外、跪舔；最终目的就是中华文明、中华文化等等。

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<p class="english-text">For example, this sentence says
“We must avoid indulging in non-innovation
And in the temporary mirror flower water moon
Embrace the spirit of innovation
With vigorous and enthusiastic vigor
The integrity of not forgetting the original intention
Keep the faith in change and move forward"
If the theme of the composition is cultural confidence
The synonym of cultural confidence is great power confidence
Patriotism, love for one's country
The opposite is cultural insecurity.
Worship foreigners and kowtow to them
The ultimate goal is Chinese civilization, Chinese culture, etc.</p>
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那么这句话就可以改写为：“我们切莫沉溺于崇洋媚外，而在暂时的镜花水月里，拥抱爱国主义，以蓬勃昂扬之姿，不忘初心之正，笃行爱国之信，砥砺前行。”这种套话、华丽而空洞的文风，基本可以概括中国中小学作文的绝大多数特点。

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<p class="english-text">So this sentence can be rewritten as:
"We must not indulge in servility
And in the temporary mirror flower water moon
Embrace patriotism
With vigorous and enthusiastic vigor
The integrity of not forgetting the original intention
Move forward with a sense of patriotism"
This cliché, flowery and empty style
This can basically summarize most of the essays written by primary and secondary schools in China.
Features</p>
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### 作文：一种教育系统内的“加密语言”

实际上，这种模板化的作文培养的与其说是写作能力，不如说是计算能力，也就是快速拼接组合现有元素，以满足特定评分规则的能力。它的**话语体系**（Discourse System: 构成特定领域知识、观念和交流方式的语言和概念框架）已经与日常汉语格格不入。

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<p class="english-text">Actually
This kind of template-based composition fosters
It's not so much about writing ability
It's computing power.
That is, quickly splicing and combining existing elements
The ability to meet specific scoring rules
Its discourse system
It is no longer compatible with everyday Chinese.</p>
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因此，我个人认为，这种写作已经不能再被视为汉语了。我们应该把它视为一种只在教育体系内流行，服务于特殊功能的**行业术语**（Industry Jargon: 特定行业或领域内使用的专业词汇和表达方式）或**加密语言**（Encrypted Language: 含义被隐藏或只有特定群体才能理解的语言）。它所有概念的内涵都被加密了，就像**火星文**（Martian: 一种在特定网络亚文化圈中流行的，通过改变汉字结构或发音来表达的非规范文字），只在特定的网络亚文化圈中流行一样。

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<p class="english-text">therefore
I personally think
This kind of writing can no longer be considered Chinese.
We should view it as a
Only popular in the education system
Serving a special function
Industry jargon or encrypted language
The connotations of all its concepts are encrypted
Like Martian
Only popular in a specific network subculture circle</p>
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模板化的作文也是如此，一旦脱离了语文考试的特定语境，这种语言就显得极其僵硬和不自然。关于语文作文的话题就到这里。

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<p class="english-text">The same is true for templated essays
Once you leave the specific context of the Chinese language exam
This language seems extremely stiff and unnatural.
That’s all for the topic of Chinese composition.</p>
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### 结语与交流邀请

最后，我想说，如果你有任何困惑或疑问，想与我交流，可以直接联系我的邮箱。例如，你想和我讨论一篇文章、一段文字、一个视频、一个社会现象，或者你的日记，请提前把相关文字发给我，我会在正式交流前阅读。或者你想和我讨论你的人生经历、困惑和情感，都是可以的。

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<p class="english-text">Finally, let me say
If you have any confusion or questions
Want to communicate with me
Just contact my email directly
for example
You want to discuss an article or a paragraph with me
A video, a social phenomenon
Or your diary
Please send me the relevant text in advance.
I will read it before the formal communication
Or you want to discuss your life experience with me
Confusion and emotion
All are possible</p>
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如果你担心隐私、安全，或对付费和交流方式有任何疑问，也请及时告诉我。如果你无法支付或加入会员，也请联系我，我会提供其他方式。具体请参考这张图片。我将把这个视频放到“心理学与教育”的列表中，也推荐大家查看这个列表中的其他视频。感谢大家的收看，再见！

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<p class="english-text">If you are concerned about privacy, security
Any questions about payment and communication methods
Please also tell me in time
If you are unable to pay or join the membership
Please contact me too
I will provide other ways
Please refer to this picture for details
I will post this video
Put it in the list of "Psychology and Education"
Also recommend to everyone
Check out my other videos in this list
Thank you for watching
goodbye!</p>
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